I've got this page coming up in about two weeks, and I've never quite liked how the script came out. I've re-written it a couple times and it got better, but still it's below adequate.
I'm willing to collaborate on the writing for this page, if anyone has some ideas of how to improve it.
So here's what's going on.
In case you are unfamiliar with my comic, the character Zak was crushed by an alien's flying saucer and is currently using a rental body, which body is that of a teenage girl. He also has moved in with a couple other teenage girls while his house gets repaired.
This scene opens on Monday morning, his second day living here.
The real purpose of this page is to establish the fact that Zak will also be attending high school. This is where the story is going, it has to happen. But I'm struggling a bit on the why. As I approach this page, I struggle to find a clear reason why Zak would go along with this. This simple fact, more than anything else, is what I'm trying to re-write.
The best reason I have right now is kind of a stretch as to why it affects Zak, or take up two pages to explain the convolution.
I was about to share my script, but I don't want to lead you to the same corner I've painted myself into; I want to keep the ideas pure.
Why would Zak actually bother going back to school? What reason would he have to go along with the lifestyle that his appearance would suggest?
I'd really like to come up with a better idea.
My webcomic: Mischief in Maytia