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The Chronicles of Crosarth - a Steampunk Adventure

 
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Traegorn



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PostPosted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 2:48 am    Post subject: The Chronicles of Crosarth - a Steampunk Adventure Reply with quote

So I recently launched a new webcomic, set in a Steampunk world, called The Chronicles of Crosarth. It's, admittedly, a bit odd - but I think it's fun...

http://www.crosarth.com/

Check it out!
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Traegorn



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PostPosted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 6:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

"Exploring" should have been two pages, it's true. It's a lesson I learned with later pages.

As for the exposition, it's just like that for Chapter One because there's so much to set up in very little time. It'll be greatly reduced from thereon out.
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dpat57
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 10:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, that is fun. Talking squid, lighter-than-air metal, what's not to like? Although I have this feeling I already know everything, that it's all been explained to me up front. Explained in words, mostly in static talk panels, with little or no imagery to accompany the backstory and make it more interesting. I think that's where the comic falls down.

The site looks okay but the color scheme felt a little drab after a while, especially that uninteresting iron plating background pic which fills the screen for a second during every page refresh.

The commander needs to look a little more feminine.

Just my opinion, don't feel obliged to agree. Good luck with it.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 3:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

dpat57 wrote:
The commander needs to look a little more feminine
I don't understand that comment, honestly.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 20, 2011 9:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I didn't see the character as looking feminine enough, it's that simple. The other characters referred to her as she, ma'am, etc. but every time I saw her in a panel, I had to remind myself this isn't a guy. Maybe it's not being able to see her eyes (is she wearing unusually shaped sunglasses?), and/or lack of close ups to accentuate any feminine attributes, and/or the huge feet? Sure, these are style choices; I'm just saying how I reacted to this character's appearance. As already stated, don't feel obliged to agree!

Traegorn wrote:
I don't understand that comment, honestly.
dpat57 wrote:
The commander needs to look a little more feminine

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 12, 2013 4:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, The Chronicles of Crosarth has now reached 200 pages! Woot!
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