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Anybody fancy critting the hell out of a picture for me?
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Lavenderbard
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PostPosted: Tue Jan 24, 2012 7:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

iaviv wrote:
Unlike that wall of text this picture can actually be understood. That is all.


I understood the wall of text. When I saw the picture I didn't think "Oh, that's what was meant," I thought, "Yes, precisely as described."

Since CN appears to have had a similar reaction, I assume he understood the text also.
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 25, 2012 7:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, gosh, I hate critting things anymore. I've been yelled at for being mean too many times. But here goes...

You don't leave enough up-and-down room at the shoulder joint, so the arms look a little like they're stuck on with pegs,. The hips have a similar problem, as CN mentioned above, the distance between the crotch and the waist is too short -- there's no room in there for an actual hip socket.

And I keep wondering why she has her hand behind her back.

But I think this picture is really cute, especially the kittens.
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 26, 2012 1:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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If she's looking down, maybe it's not the ear position but perspective. If head is looking a bit from upside then ears should look like that too not from a front view, The face must be a little lower, with more hair visible and the neck a bit more hidden behind the face and that's all. If she's not turning her head down, ears are still a bit up.

I liked the first hands better. While the arms lenght is better, I see the fingers occuping almost all the hand. You must add some more space for the palm. I think, the thumb must be pointing outwards and no inwards for that position (This can be a matter of position too).

As mentioned before, I think the breasts look a bit low for the size of the body.
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 6:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

You might want to look up some reference images of shoulders and necks. The line of a person's shoulders when their arms are at their sides is not horizontal (unless they're wearing shoulderpads) and the neck is not a pair of perfect vertical lines. Looking at renderings of the muscular and skeletal systems is helpful! (the muscles at the front of the neck form a V-shape from the sides of the jaw to the centre of the clavicle; the muscle covering the back of the neck and shoulders causes the shoulders to have a sloped appearance. here is an example.) The place where the neck is meeting the shoulders forms a right angle in your drawing, particularly noticeable on NOFX-guy; on real people this is more of a curve.

The other thing I'm noticing is that you are using a very saturated palette. There is nothing wrong with saturated colours, but your palette feels a bit... disjointed? Colours are altered by lighting, which unifies them into an overall image that looks like the colours belong together. This is a great tutorial on colour use. c:

You have a very cute and cartoony style, especially the kitties!
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