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[FrozenBox]

Ok, I'm taking a dive here, head first. See where it takes me. Hopefully some where good.

Anyway, name's Frank and I own Bi-Morphon, originally called Mutualistic Android Organism. For the first 2 chapters, I just needed to start with something and go with it, so excuse the sketches. It's the story I'm actually looking for a critique. I started this about alittle over a year ago.

Chapter 3 is where I'm starting to settle my grounds. Art is still sketchy, but better. Fiddling around with Manga Studio.

Chapter 4 (current chapter), my style is starting to settle down more, so here is where I need critique/help with. My proportions are looking sharper. In the end of Chapter 4, I plan to redraw all 4, with the new (permanent) name applied.

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Synopsis: Alien robots have been sent to defend the universe from dark alien forces. These machines bond with organic lifeforms, giving them special abilities such as super strength, super speed, among other abilities.

A duo keep failing, not able to save planets from utter destruction. After reaching Earth, they meet their human hosts and defend it from an evil that’s been unstoppable. Can the humans help the androids protect Earth? Or will they only postpone the inevitable?

http://www.frozenboxcomics.com

Be gentle. ._.

[vaslittlecrow]

My biggest problems: Posing and stylistic continuity in the latter chapter. Everything has an air of almost there, but not quite.

I absolutely love your lettering and your website is decent.

The story is not my thing, but I am more of a hard sci-fi person when I do read that genre.
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[FrozenBox]

vaslittlecrow wrote:

My biggest problems: Posing and stylistic continuity in the latter chapter. Everything has an air of almost there, but not quite. I absolutely love your lettering and your website is decent. The story is not my thing, but I am more of a hard sci-fi person when I do read that genre.

Whew, I thought I was far off from what I was doing, because I'll be honest. I'm only doing what I learned on my own, so I guess I can say I don't know what I'm doing. Just... swingin, y'know? Though I am trying.

I don't quite under stand, though, about the posing and stylistic continuity. Do you mean it's almost the same throughout?

I just looked through ch4 and I THINK I know what you mean. (I checked as I write this post.) Still might need you to be alittle more elaborate. Anyway, I hope that by the end of CH4 I get it.

Thank you for your input! Highly appreciate it.

[vaslittlecrow]

Studying anatomy will help your poses look more mechanically accurate, dynamic and natural. All of us as artists (including me) can really benefit from that. I know that there's a really great thread on that topic in this forum, so do a search on anatomy. Here's a websites that may help you out:
http://fineart.sk/photo-references

Doing more gesture drawings from life will also help a lot in creating better fluidity and more looseness in your work. You have very creative poses, so a little study may take them to the next level.

As for stylistic consistency, make sure each page looks close in style to the next page. It's good to experiment, but try to keep the look more consistent. For the most part you do a great job, but it's close not quite there.

Does this help?
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[FrozenBox]

Yes, it really does! I appreciate the time you took to write all that, so thank you very much. Like I said, hoping that by the end of ch4, my style will become solid.

[vaslittlecrow]

I look forward to watching your growth as an artist. I really mean that.
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[FrozenBox]

New page!

Akina and Okimo take shots for the hostage in order to protect her! They hurt, but it's nothing fatal. However, the only way off a tower while under pressure...

[smbhax.com]

Fixed link :)
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[FrozenBox]

smbhax.com wrote:

Fixed link

Oops! I have no idea how that equal sign was added in there.

Thank you very much.

EDIT: Fixed the link.

[FrozenBox]

New page!

Promise the link works this time. :3

[FrozenBox]

Chapter 4 is almost complete!

Check it out!