otterkit, your entire description is made up of generalities rather than specifics. Generalities tend not to grab the imagination and draw people in.
Introduce us to some characters, and let us know the problems they are facing. Show us a bit of your world.
Here, I'll do an example.
First the way you did it:
This is a science fiction with a little bit of psionics mixed in story that has a solid plot. I've been working on this world for three years, and the characters have real depth and the futuristic tech has almost real science behind it. It's a fairly light-hearted story with lots of action, but no real graphic violence or sex or anything, and should work for family audiences... PG-13 at most.
Now the way it should be done:
Bambi is a genetic construct designed to look like a blond bimbo with purple eyes. Designing your children like that happens to be illegal and Bambi would love to pay her mother back for all the pain and botheration -- too bad her mother already got herself killed in a shoot-out with the police. Still Bambi's better off than any of the rest of the family, her sister Serena is eight feet tall (with chocolate colored skin) her brother Peluge is a blue ape, and poor Terence doesn't even have a body (but nobody can manipulate the internets like he can, it's almost like the network is an extension of... well, himself.)
The four of them work as private investigators, and they've just been asked to retrieve a mysterious alien gemstone from the sticky-fingered low-lifes who made off with it without asking nicely first. The catch? The thieves crash-landed on a world with primitive natives. Bringing technology in is forbidden, so the galactic government wants Bambi to do the job without any gadgets or advanced weaponry. The thieves, on the other hand, are known to be armed with plasma guns. Is Bambi crazy enough to take the assignment anyway? You bet she is!